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Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficulty. Do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years, people believed that access to
university
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 is more difficult for both poor and rich families. In
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 will explain both views regarding the relationship between the factors. On
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 hand, people who have been undergoing poverty, are facing
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 major problem which is the financial distress of their families. They prefer to get a quick job for seeking some funds to fulfil the basic needs of their relatives,
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 of enrolling on some
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.
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, they do not understand that being graduated from the varsity will increase the value of the person itself.
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, in the future, they do not know how the importance of getting the title undergraduate program.
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, on many campuses right now, the institutions have been issuing some scholarship programs to aid the lower society to support them as a scholar in the future.
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, it is believed that most people from high-level classes often underestimate an undergraduate program since they already have everything, including wealth.
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 of the study cases in Indonesia stipulated that major of the students who enter the
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 come from average middle-class communities
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 of modern-class society, and
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 of the reasons is that children in Indonesia are afraid of dropping into the lowest class of poverty.
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, it will create a bad perception since the rich society frequently opts for
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 choice,
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 the population who enrol on the academy are coming from poorer communities. In conclusion, based on both views, I believe there is not any correlation between the economic level of the community and the hardship of being accepted at the college. Since the reasons for registering for
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 are depending on the skills and competencies of individuals, not on the financial leverage of students.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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