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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? what sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to childen?

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One of the most controversial issues around the world is
children
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 and everything that
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 to them.Meanwhile,some people believe
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 is a good way to teach them
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 between right and wrong.I completely disagree with physical
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,and I think, it is better to punish
children
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 with non-violence
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.In
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some relevant examples. It is well-established fact that
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corporal
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,not only is not an effective way to control
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children
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children's
 self-esteem.
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, some physical punishments
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can damage them for long
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.
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,some parents or teachers harm
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stick
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,and the wound may remain for weeks on their arms or their legs.Other
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 that has a negative impact on them are
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 with bad words or unkind
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 with them .All
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behaviour
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 can have
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effect
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 on
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children's
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 and
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. There are many alternative
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 to punish
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 in non-violent ways.The reason is that
children
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 are open-minded and they are ready to learn many things in appropriate ways.
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firstly
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,can learn from their
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 during their childhood and
throughout
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 communication with their
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.
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 imitate their
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behaviour
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 and can learn right and wrong easily.
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,when
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 do something wrong
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 can easily
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 them
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 their weekly
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 or
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 their favourite cartoons
instead
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 of physical
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.Teachers in schools
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 can teach them
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an effective ways
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.
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hurts
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 their friends they should be forced to apologise
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 friends.
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,parents and teachers have enormous duties toward
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 and their
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influence
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an influence
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 on
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 mentally,physically and socially.With the cooperation of
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 we can gain the desired result.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • moral foundation
  • constructive punishment
  • physical or emotional harm
  • natural consequences
  • losing privileges
  • extra chores
  • positive reinforcement
  • time-outs
  • reflect on actions
  • open communication
  • internalize
  • role modeling
  • positive guidance
  • fear or resentment
  • alternative methods
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