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Today’s teenagers struggle with many social issues. Some people think that is because their parents are spending more time at work than at home. Do you agree or disagree?

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Parents
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 are
the
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 paramount part of
child's
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a child's
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 life . Nowadays ,
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an enermous
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enermous
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enormous
 number of
parents
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 are
hardly
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 working and they have
not
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no
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time
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 even for family , more precisely for their
children
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. A plenty number of
youngster’s
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youngsters’
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 social problems
caused
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are caused
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 by
lack
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a lack
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 of
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parents
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 support . I
totaly
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totally
 agree with
statement
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the statement
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 . In general ,
children
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 are tiny creations who need someone's
assitance
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assistance
, and it is obvious that
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 role is suitable for their mother and father. Human values like kindness and happiness can be
gotton
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gotten
 by
relationship
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a relationship
the relationship
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 with
parents
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however
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 it can be unnoticed.
For instance
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 , all we know about kids and teenagers from
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the orphanage
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orphanage
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, and
it
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apply
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points out
lack
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a lack
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 of true love and
a
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kindness from
mother
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mothers
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, same situation with certain youngsters whose dream is
spending
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time
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 with mothers and fathers.
Consequently
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 ,
children
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 will become more and more violent, and
this
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 is one of the most popular issues
of
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 our society.
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 ,
parents
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 ,
they
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apply
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aren't only a partner to share
a
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happiness and other values ,they are
also
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a
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lifelong
teacher
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teachers
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.
Firstly
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, every parent should be a mirror or an example to follow, and without
them
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,them
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 teenagers can imitate someone
bad
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badly
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,
such
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 situations reflect us importance of teachers as a father who can help to distinguish good and bad .
Secondly
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 , cause of unspent
time
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 with the family, little ones will feel alone, not only in the home
,
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but
also
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 in
whole
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the whole
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society
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of society
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. In conclusion, the are plenty number of important factors
such
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 as being together and getting true
mother’s
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mothers’
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 love that can protect them from the issues . Eventually, I believe that
parents
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 must spend enough
time
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 with their
children
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