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Students should focus on learning in the classroom rather than show their status by wearing fashionable clothes. Thebefore, all students have to wear school uniforms. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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There is no denying the fact that the main impact of
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school
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 on
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pupils
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 is arguable.
While
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 it is a commonly held belief that youngsters must wear
school
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uniform
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instead
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 of wearing
a
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fashionable
clothes
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. From my
perpective
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perspective
, I strongly believe that youth must wear
school
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uniform
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uniforms
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.
This
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why
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 I believe
this
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. On the one hand, wearing
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school
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a school
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outfit
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outfits
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 can
show
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respect
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 and give a sense of responsibility.
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, if the juveniles wear a
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 in the
school
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 competition, they usually will reflect their attitude and
show
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 their
respect
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 toward their
school
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.
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, the juveniles must know that
school
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uniform
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 is important as it gives a sense of honour,
while
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fashion
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clothes
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 reflect
lack
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a lack
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 of
respect
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.
Thus
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, it becomes apparent that
pupils
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 must wear
school
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uniform
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uniforms
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 to
show
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 their
respect
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.
Furthermore
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, teenagers should wear
school
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outfit
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outfits
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 as wearing stylish
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 in
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school
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 will let other stricken scale students feel uncomfortable. To illustrate, a prestigious journal article published that 60% of poor youngsters reported they
commited
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committed
school
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 crimes as they
bullied
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were bullied
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 by their
clothes
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 at
the
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school
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.
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,
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 youngsters may feel jealous
from
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of
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pupils
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affluent
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an affluent
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family
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families
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,
moreover
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, wearing
such
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clothes
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 may give the chances for other juveniles to know the status of their friends and bully them. Indeed,
this
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 makes it clear that folks must wear their
uniform
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 at
school
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 to avoid bullying. In conclusion, in my opinion, I consider that the youth must be
committment
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commitment
committed
by
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to
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 the
school
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uniform
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 to
show
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respect
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 and to prevent haeting between the
pupils
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic focus
  • fashion trends
  • peer pressure
  • social class disparities
  • disciplinary environment
  • cost-effective
  • school identity
  • sense of belonging
  • individual expression
  • dress codes
  • professional attire
  • body types
  • school spirit
  • creativity suppression
  • equal footing
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