The graph below shows the pollution levels in London between 1600 and 2000.

The graph below shows the pollution levels in London between 1600 and 2000.
Given is a line graph illustrating the level of
sulphur
dioxide and
Smoke
per cubic metre in London from 1600 to 2000.
Overall
, the amounts of
Sulphur
dioxide were at least two times as high as those of
Smoke
over the provided period.
Similarly
, both of them constituted the same degree in the initial year, nearly 10 units.
However
,
while
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the amounts of
Smoke
increased marginally until the end of the 18th reaching the plateau at just under 500 micrograms, with a profound drop in the second half of the
17th century
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Sulphur
dioxide jumped rapidly through these
years
and by 1900 it consisted of two times more in the air than the first one. In the
years
that followed, their figures declined dramatically
especially
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Sulphur
dioxides. Its level, in the next four decades, roughly halved to 500 micrograms and started to fluctuate, whilst
Smoke
began it ten
years
ago. These profound fluctuations continued for the next 30
years
comprising a negative trend. Currently, their degree is as many as it used to be in the starting year.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sulphur, smoke, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuate" was used 2 times.
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