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Nowadays, instead of locally sourced produce, many supermarkets sell a variety of foods imported from countries all across the world. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages

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In recent times, a variety of grains are sold by many mega-shopping centres which come from other parts of the world,
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 of being locally based. I would say that
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 trend has more downsides than pros because
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 meals are expensive
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 it can discourage local farmers.
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 with, bringing food from foreign nations is pricy. To explain, exporting the meals stuff can pass through a double taxation process, one from the place from which it comes, and
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, from the destination.
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, all these duty charges will rise the end product cost.
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, mangoes which produce in my country are less costly than those that come from an outer place.
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, taking
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 from other countries is over-priced.
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, it can discourage local farmers. Since grain producers devote a large sum of cash to prepare their products for sale and if it cannot give them proper income.
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, it can deter them and
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, they will not grow food which will be a huge burden on a nation’s economy. To illustrate, in a wheat season, a small landholder spends millions of rupees to make wheat flour.
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, taking
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 from other nations can be beneficial because it can make peoples’ health robust. To exemplify, many nations cannot grow all kinds of
foods
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, since they do not have the required climate. So exporting those
foods
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 can provide a number of minerals to dwellers and ultimately they will have perfect well-being.
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, many supermarkets prefer to bring eating materials from other parts of the world, rather than from local places and
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 trend has more negative points than advantages
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 the fact that it’s high-priced
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 it can let down national grain growers. All in all, I feel that authorities need to facilitate local farmers and give them the latest technologies, so they will be able to grow each kind of food.

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