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Whoever controls the media also controls opinions and attitudes of the people and there is little that can be done to rectify this. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days,
due to
 technological development, there are many historical documentary
films
 which have lack historical accuracy. A part of our society believes that
this
 false information about the past is effective for students. I strongly disagree with
this
 point of view, because imprecise knowledge from series and
films
 can be improved the stereotype of history in learners and can give them wrong data that they do not need. And in
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 I would like to explain why I do not agree with
this
 view.
Firstly
, many of the current historical motion pictures provide some materials for giving them new knowledge, but not all of them are historically correct.
Therefore
, individuals have wrong data and use the inaccurately, respectively.
For instance
, graduates of universities should collect their reports and a lot of advice for presentations, for
this
, they need to look for resources
such
 as
films
 and TV shows.
However
, if documentary
films
 do have not definite details, it means that individuals will apply them wrongly. Turning to the other hand argument, there are
also
 benefits to
this
 for others. Because even if people see the wrong movie, they will not see the wrong topic, of course. And they are pretty keen on the movie they are watching, they are interested in that history, dive into that topic and learn it completely, they can correct the mistakes, they have learned. And
also
 it helps people to have historical knowledge.
To sum up
, others think that
films
 and tv-shows are precise resources for learning history. Personally, I believe that they are not because documentary
films
 are created for general presentation and entertainment.
In addition
, they give unuseful and wrong material to those who need facts.
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