Nowadays, we can watch entertainment performance on the screen and no need to watch it live. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
These days,
due to
the development of technology, we can enjoy most entertainment
activities through the screen and no need to go outside as we did in the past. However
, there are certain aspects that watching online can not bring to the audience, therefore
, I claim that I partly agree with this
statement.
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that watching Wrong verb form
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entertainment
performances online has its outstanding advantages. First of all, it gives people a comfortable zone to enjoy the shows. For example
, we can sit on the sofa with a popcorn bag and watch a Netflix movie on the TV's big screen, instead
of going to the cinema. It will ensure an extremely satisfying feeling for the audience. Moreover
, we can save money for those activities if we watch them online. By using technology devices at home like televisions, and smartphones, viewers will have full-watching experiences with less amount of money than enjoying them in person. However
, it
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there
remains
some disadvantages that are not able to Correct subject-verb agreement
remain
offer
to the viewers.
Even though watching online Wrong verb form
be offered
have
its own benefits, it cannot replace the direct watching method for some reasons. Correct subject-verb agreement
has
Firstly
, watching the performances live will offer a realistic feeling to the audience. For me, coming to the venue and enjoying the music
show are the ideal ways to immerse in music
and the air of the concert, for example
. On top of that, it offers chances to meet new friends and form new relationships. There are so many people who become best friends after watching the shows together,
and strengthen their friendship through the same activities. Remove the comma
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Last
but not least, it can be seen as a way to support your idols to continue working in the entertainment
industry. Buying a music
concert ticket and coming to enjoy the live show are some effective ways to cheer the artists up and support them to make
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in making
music
, for instance
.
In conclusion, I only agree with this
opinion partly after considering the benefits and drawbacks of it. On top of that, choosing any type of watching
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entertainment
performances
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performance
are depend
on each person's personality and purpose.Wrong verb form
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