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In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Having easy access to
food
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 and drinks produced in foreign
countries
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 has become quite common among
citizens
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 in
countries
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 all over the world.
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, it has some financial benefits and provides a wide range of choices.
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 essay will discuss how
this
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 phenomenon makes people's lives easier,
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, strengthens the connection between different cultures.
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 with, human beings always have desires to taste something special, so, they have new experiences that give them pleasure.
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, if humans had had to go through hundreds of kilometres to taste delicious products from foreign
countries
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, they would have wasted their time and money. Obviously, companies have more consumers around the world by providing easy access to their
food
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,
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, it is financially beneficial both for foreign
citizens
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 and
food
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 factories.
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, after the Dubai chocolate factories had filled the store shelves, Dubai chocolate in my country, the popularity has risen among local
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 and factories could
increase
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 profits by 20%.
Food
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 and drinks from foreign
countries
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 often reflect their cultures, so, it might interest local
citizens
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.
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, cookers can find new supplements and build imaginations about foreigners' eating habits. New ideas appeared
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 kind of support.
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, my mum adds a catalyzer, which makes the cooking process of cookies and pies fast. She found out about
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 catalyzer in a local supermarket and it is produced in Georgia and tastes very delicious and economies time. In conclusion, the network between
countries
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 might be set up by exchanging
food
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 and drinks.
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,
this
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 simple method has a financial advantage which makes lives easier.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear and distinct main point, and use topic sentences to guide the reader through your arguments.
task achievement
Provide more real-world examples or data to solidify your arguments and demonstrate their relevance to different contexts.
coherence cohesion
Ensure a more seamless transition between ideas to enhance the flow of your essay, making it easier for the reader to follow.
coherence cohesion
Well-structured introduction that clearly sets up the argument, and a conclusion that revisits the main points.
task achievement
The essay presents clear ideas about financial benefits and cultural exchange opportunities related to the accessibility of foreign food products.
task achievement
The use of a personal example helps to illustrate the point about economic benefits and helps to engage the reader.
Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrition
  • cultural exposure
  • competitive markets
  • economic boost
  • employment opportunities
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental impact
  • local produce
  • food security
  • global supply chain
  • sustainable practices
  • consumer choice
  • market dynamics
  • price competition
  • agricultural sector
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