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convenience food will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace the traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion ?

#convenience #food #foods #methods #preparation
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Nowadays, traditional
foods
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 and ways of
food
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 preparation
eventually
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 changed
by
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convenience
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food
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, because it will
became
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 common
food
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 for
people
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. I agree with
this
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 opinion
,
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 because
convenience
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food
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easier
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is easier
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 preparation to
cook
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 and easier to find rather than traditional
food
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. In my opinion,
people
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 change from traditional
foods
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 to
convenience
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foods
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 because the methods of preparation
is
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 easier. Most
people
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 can
cook
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convenience
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food
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 easily, since the material is common,
also
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 by simple instruction. To
cook
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convenience
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food
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product
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products
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,
such
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 as
,
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 instant
noodle
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noodles
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, spaghetti, and fried rice just
by
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apply
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four
and
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or
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 five steps in 15-30 minutes. Different
with of
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from
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 traditional
foods
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, the methods are difficult and
complicate
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.
For instance
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,
to
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cooking
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cook
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 gudeg; the one
of
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traditional
food
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 in Yogyakarta,
it
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takes times 2 and 3 days.
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, the steps are very difficult and
complicate
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, like
people
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needs
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know
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to know
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 the colour and the smell of the gudeg if done, just
few
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people
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 know and
understanding
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about
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the steps. So, most
people
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food
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by
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to
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convenience
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foods
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. The second reason,
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convenience
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is convenience
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food
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 easily find in any
locations
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location
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, like in the downtown, suburban, or village. Every
shops
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shop
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 have
convenience
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food
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 like instant noodle and spaghetti. For traditional
foods
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, sometimes the material is difficult to find. The Gudeg’s material
it
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is
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 easily find in Yogyakarta, but in
another location
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other locations
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 sometimes is difficult, because the tree of
gudeg’s
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judge’s
 material cannot grow in that
locations
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location
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.
To conclude
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,
people
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 change from traditional
foods
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convenience
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food
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 because it
easier
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is easier
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 to
cook
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 and find in any
locations
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location
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, but traditional
food
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 is still important
,
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apply
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 since
it
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part
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is part
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 of the culture. So, some
people
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 still
cook
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 traditional
foods
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in
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on
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 special occasions like
wedding
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weddings
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 and family
holiday
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holidays
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.
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