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Many people believe that reducing speed limits is the best option for road safety improvement. Do you think there are other measures that could be put in place? What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? 20:35

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Nowadays,
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 the high risk of
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 accidents, many people are concerned about
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 safety and possible options
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its
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further
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 improvement. Indeed, some individuals believe that reducing
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 limit would considerably adjust the situation,
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 others would disagree and promote additional ways of relevant problem-solving. It is worth considering that
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 with the
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 century, obtaining a driving license has become more common
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 both young people and adolescents.
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,
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 everyday situation on the highways has significantly worsened and is
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causing
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 likelihood of traffic accidents with the possibility of body injury or even death.
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, conscious citizens are
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disturbed
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an
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improved
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 traffic regulations. Naturally, in my firm belief, a suggestion of reducing speed limits would definitely boost
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road
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 safety,
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, there are other factors why individuals are breaking the speed rules.
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, alcohol or drug misuse, which is unfortunately
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the most frequent
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of
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 the car crash. Another thing to consider
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is
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 necessity of
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alternative measures which would control obeying the law.
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, if
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governmental
 authorities increase the
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 of fines and commence additional
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regulation
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 would strengthen
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road
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 safety and secure
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 lives significantly. Of course, not every citizen would be delighted with
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 changes,
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 we much more value human lives. Taking everything into consideration, our contemporary lives are deeply connected with the traffic and it is imperative to protect ourselves and our offspring, and take
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responsibility
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 an effortless way.

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task response
Your essay addresses the question and provides a response to the prompt. However, there are areas where the argument could be deepened. For instance, you could introduce more specific measures apart from speed limits and penalization. Additional strategies like promoting safer car technologies or improving public transportation could be explored.
coherence cohesion
Your essay follows a logical structure, yet some transitions between ideas could be smoother. For example, linking the paragraph about alternative measures more clearly to the disadvantages might enhance coherence. Work on ensuring each paragraph flows well into the next.
coherence cohesion
While you have introductory and concluding sections, they could be more robust. The essay would benefit from a stronger introduction that frames the discussion and a conclusion that succinctly summarizes the points made and provides a final viewpoint.
task response
Provide more concrete examples to support your arguments. Including specific instances or data related to successful speed limit reductions or alternative measures would strengthen your points and make the essay more persuasive.
language accuracy
Work on reducing minor grammatical errors and typo corrections (e.g., 'causing' instead of 'cousing', 'responsibility' instead of 'responbility'). These small fixes can significantly improve the readability of your essay.
task response
Your essay shows a clear understanding of the topic and addresses both sides of the argument, which is essential for a balanced discussion.
language accuracy
The use of vocabulary is appropriate, and your ideas are generally easy to follow. This reflects a good grasp of the language.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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