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Global warming is one of the biggest threats to our environment. What causes global warming? What solutions are there to this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

#threats #environment
It is true that global warming has been
serious
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 problem
to
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 our planet for a long time. When it comes to
the
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global warming, there are various triggers
resulted
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in
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this
, and I will explain the reasons and recommend some methods to deal
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.
To begin
 with, I am convinced that
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 factor of global warming is human activities
such
 as
transportation
, deforestation, and electricity generation. Take fossil fuels
for example
, all our life is fulfilled with
this
, which is processed to any products and
this
 process could release greenhouse gas
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 in global warming.
Secondly
,
massive
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 amount of carbon dioxide is emitted
due to
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 amount of gasoline from
transportation
.
Also
, the more
electric
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 is generated by coals, the more emission. Meanwhile, deforestation for living or commercial purposes,
which
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decreases the function of
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the plant
a plant
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plant
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plants
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 to help consume greenhouse gas.
Nonetheless
,
global
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 warming issue could be solved through many solutions.
Frist
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 of all, governments and companies together figure out
alternative
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alternatives
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 including renewable energy, which reduce utilize of fossil fuels.
In other words
, wind, solar, nuclear, and water electricity generation are
also
effective
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alternative
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 to deal with
coal
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 overuse problem. Together humans take public
transportation
 to decrease carbon dioxide
emission
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emissions
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instead
 of private vehicles.
Finally
, governments should make strong laws and give punishments
to
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 those who destroy forests and follow the Paris agreement to control their countries’
emission
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emissions
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. To summarize, I believe that owing to human activities, especially
transportation
, deforestation, and electricity generation,
planet
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the planet
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 has undergone
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a seriously
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seriously
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 global warming
problem
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problems
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.
However
, We can take various actions to mitigate it, and
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the environment
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environment
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environmental
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 situation will be improved in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Climate change
  • Earth's atmosphere
  • Carbon dioxide
  • Methane
  • Nitrous oxide
  • Emissions
  • Renewable energy
  • Energy efficiency
  • Afforestation
  • Carbon footprint
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