You took an elderly member of your family, who was not able to walk properly, to a museum and he/she faced a few problems. Write a letter to the manager of the museum. In your letter, * say why you visited the museum * describe the problems you faced * suggest what can be done to avoid those problems

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Dear Sir or Madam, I visited the British National Museum

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Sunday with my family and I'm writing to express the disappointment we had. I visited your museum with my grandmother, who has a disability in her legs. Since your gallery is the biggest in London and we expected that it was well organized for any kind of people, we decided to visit there.

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, unfortunately, we found it very difficult to enjoy your paintings. First of all, you don't offer special assistance for the disabled.

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, there were no wheelchair facilities.

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, every time we met steps, we needed to bring her chair with our hands.

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, there is only one multipurpose toilet and she needs to wait for a long time to use it. With these bad experiences, I would like to suggest you some solutions.

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build toilets for special people on every floor in order to avoid the long queue.

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, please hire some special assistants for the disabled so that all elderly people enjoy your paintings. I would be grateful if you could solve these problems so that no one would face the same difficulties again. Faithfully yours, Ayaka Hioki

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

198 words

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