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What do you think advantages of living a big cities outweigh the disadvantages

#cities
These days, many
people
 live in
a large cities
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large cities
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.Some
people
 believe that living in urban areas is a great choice
while
 others said that living in rural areas is better. In
this
 essay, I am going to discuss both views and explain why I think
its
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 advantages are more
then
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than
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its
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their
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 disadvantages. First and foremost, I will mention the benefits of
this
. One of the useful aspects is public transport,
that is
 to say, you may use any vehicle if you live in
towns
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.
Anoteher
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Another
 benefit of
this
 is
quality
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 of education. The reason why I think so is that most of the qualified teachers mainly teach in schools or universities which are located in cities.
In addition
 to
this
, education plays a key role in our lives.
Therefore
, we can say that it
as
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an
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 merit of the urban environment over the rural one.
On the other hand
, despite having several good aspects of
this
, it
also
 has some drawbacks.
Firstly
, it should be noted that
great
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 deal of towns
are
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 polluted by toxic fumes emitted from cars.
However
,
this
 is not the case in the less number of vehicles. Another demerit is traffic jams because they may cause
to
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people
to
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late
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their
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for their
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 jobs.
Lastly
,
this downsides
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this downside
these downsides
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 belongs to those who live in multi-storey
bulidings
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buildings
, which means if there is an earthquake,
people
 who are living in the sky houses will be
under
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in
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the
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great danger.
To sum up
, since there are plenty of positive sides
of
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 living in the city, I believe that
priorities
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 of residing in the urban area are more than the negative sides.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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