Some experts believe that when a country is already rich, any additional increase in economic wealth does not make its citizens any more satisfied. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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point of view and I will explain why I am not sure I agree with that. It is generally believed by some professional figures, that additionals rise in economic wealth is not so crucial for a rich country.

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as Japan, the U.S.A, Switzerland or Cina are aware of their wide economic power and these governments offer a lot of benefits for their citizens.

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as funding for projects, well-organized cities,and a lot of job opportunities. In fact, they do not feel a significant sense of satisfaction with the increase in their economy. Made

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true that some surveys used by The Italian University of Parma, reveal that citizens from

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which a strong economy, are really grateful and satisfied by any additional rise, in the economic sector. As consequence

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or to improve the technology equipment in schools. Personally, I tend to think as a matter of fact that

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is the right view. Because it is logical that more money means more opportunities in any sector of the country. Hospitals, schools, museums and even historical buildings can have the possibility to obtain a lot of benefits.

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explained why I strongly disagree with them.

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