Some experts believe that when a country is already rich, any additional increase in economic wealth does not make its citizens any more satisfied. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The thought of some experts
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is that
people
from rich
countries
are not satisfied by
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hypothetical increase in their economy. In
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I will discuss
this
point of view and I will explain why I am not sure I agree with that. It is generally believed by some professional figures, that additionals rise in economic wealth is not so crucial for a rich country.
People
from
countries
such
as Japan, the U.S.A, Switzerland or Cina are aware of their wide economic power and these governments offer a lot of benefits for their citizens.
Thus
,
people
have yet what they want,
such
as funding for projects, well-organized cities,and a lot of job opportunities. In fact, they do not feel a significant sense of satisfaction with the increase in their economy. Made
this
point, it is
also
true that some surveys used by The Italian University of Parma, reveal that citizens from
countries
which a strong economy, are really grateful and satisfied by any additional rise, in the economic sector. As consequence
due to
this
increase, they can ask for more funding for some start
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or to improve the technology equipment in schools. Personally, I tend to think as a matter of fact that
this
is the right view. Because it is logical that more money means more opportunities in any sector of the country. Hospitals, schools, museums and even historical buildings can have the possibility to obtain a lot of benefits.
To conclude
, in
this
essay I discussed the general view of some experts about
people
from rich
countries
. I
also
explained why I strongly disagree with them.
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