Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

These days we see more and more
people
switch to other medical therapies from traditional ones. I personally disagree that
this
trend would bring more positives than
people
expected.
Although
,
people
can enjoy some benefits from some alternative healthcare methods.
For example
, a variety of pocket-sized smart devices like mobile blood pressure meters have emerged in the market and allow
people
to keep updated on their physical conditions at home. They have become more popular by offering greater convenience and cutting the costs of transporting to hospitals.
In addition
,
people
tend to take
health
products that producers claim to be derived from natural food, as they believe their deprived
health
conditions resulting from poor lifestyle, lack of exercise and sleep seem to be curable by off-the-counter medical products.
However
, I am all for encouraging
people
to stay with the traditional ways when it comes to their physical problems.
Firstly
, there might be some hidden side effects for new medicines since they are not used by patients for long periods enough compared to traditional ones.
Secondly
, it is harmful to
people
who are suffering from chronic problems
such
as diabetes and hypertension to stop regular
health
checks by professionals, which is essential for patients and doctors to stay tuned for the development of diseases. In short, visiting hospitals is the major way for you to prevent your
health
conditions from developing into more serious ones. In conclusion, though supporters may argue the benefits non-traditional medical methods have on us, I would remain to say that the advantages of offline clinic trips will not be overtaken in the foreseeable future.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • Finally
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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