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In some countries, it is becoming increasingly common for people to follow a vegetarian diet. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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The practice of following a vegetarian
diet
 is ascending among
people
 in various nations.
This
 essay argues that the demerit of
this
 is humans likely to consume less amount of
protein
,
while
 I believe that the merits of having veg foods outweigh the drawbacks because it manages the level of
cholesterol
 in the body. The main disadvantage of not including non-veg food in the
diet
 is the deficiency of one of the main macros which
is
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protein
. It is necessary for human beings as it is responsible for muscle growth. If
people
 will not consume enough
protein
that is
 required by the body ,they will face health issues related to bones and muscles.
For example
, Arthritis is a common disease among women in India because most of the females do not consume an adequate amount of
protein
 in their
diet
.
However
, I think that the rise in
cholesterol
 because of animal meat is a serious concern. The major advantage of following a vegetarian
diet
 is
people
 have fewer chances to suffer from diseases caused
due to
cholesterol
. Because cereals, fruits or vegetables have an almost negligible amount of
cholesterol
,
whereas
 animal meat's value is high. Humans who have a high level of
cholesterol
 are at risk of cardiovascular diseases, which can even lead to death.
For instance
, in America, the number of
people
 who die from heart stroke is more than in India.
Therefore
, I believe that a non-veg
diet
 has a detrimental effect on humans.
To conclude
, animal meats contain
protein
 which is beneficial for
people
,
,
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however
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 I feel that balance of
cholesterol
 levels has a more significant upside.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Vegetarian diet
  • Chronic diseases
  • Carbon footprint
  • Deforestation
  • Animal welfare
  • Nutritional deficiencies
  • Balanced intake
  • Societal norms
  • Meat-dominant
  • Sustainable living
  • Plant-based proteins
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