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Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating to the environment, population and education as well . What problems will your country face in the next 10 years? How can these problems be overcome

#countries #world #challenges #environment #population #education #country #face #years
countries have faced a
lot
 of
problem
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problems
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 throughout the decade but the problem has been solved in the future .alot of countries will face in the next two years is
unemployment
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the unemployment
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 rate and
also
 employed who will terminate, and the economic gdb will
dropdown
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drop down
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.
people
 will struggle with
basic
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a basic
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 entity,and the food production industry has fallen down during ,pandemic there is a
lot
 of need for employees so employers hired a
lot
 of
people
due to
 the
inflication
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infliction
inflation
implication
 rate has been down for their
company
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companies
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they start terminating a
lot
 of
people
 recently from google ,the Facebook
has
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fired a
lot
 of
people
 in recent year , a
lot
 of
people
 move towards the city so the
workers
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 in the rural area reduce.still not getting workers from the agricultural
sector
 , and construction
sector
 so it is filled by a foreigner so the production of food in the country is declining it will reflect worldwide so in future a
lot
 of peoples will struggle on the food the government should forecast the issue and proper remedies
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has
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 been followed. 70percentage of my country's GDP is given by the agricultural
sector
 but today the worker for
the
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job
 is reducing so my country's gdb
is fell
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is felled
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 down in the near future so a
lot
 of unemployment has
rising
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.
people
 thought like IT
sector
 is a good
job
 so they omitted all the other jobs so there is a vacuum in the
job
 so government should involve in the problem and will give an equal salary to all the
job
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