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Global warming is one of the biggest threats in the world nowadays. What causes prblem warming? What measures can be taken to solve this problem?

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These days one of the biggest issues that governments trying to tackle is the earth's hot temperature. In my opinion,
air
pollution
 and not qualified public transportation facilities are the main reason for
this
 catastrophe.
Firstly
,
air
pollution
that is
 caused by human activities is the main trigger to increase the trend line of global warming.
For example
, in urban areas most of the big factories
use
 fossil fuel sources as energy sources
as a result
 they produce more
air
pollution
 which is harm full for the environment and exacerbates the situation.
Secondly
, using not facilitated public transportation system is another reason for the growth of
this
 disaster. To put it another way, all public transport vehicles that people
use
 regularly
use
 is old and most of them produce carbon dioxide which makes the earth hot and hotter.
For instance
, buses that we see most of the time around the town
use
 gas as fuel so they are real dangers. To tackle those issues using alternative sources
such
 as fuel for massive manufactures are vital and
this
 salutation mitigates the impact of
air
pollution
that is
 treating the earth
also
 by using green energies factorise can be more environmentally friendly and help to decrease the rate of global warming.
Likewise
 improving the transportation system by using electric vehicles
instead
 of the old fashion ones is another irrefutable solution that can help the governments to somehow to prevent
this
 catastrophe.
In other words
, using hybrid cars can completely eliminate the problem of carbon dioxide rate. In conclusion, goal warming
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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