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young people learn more a good behavior from books and films or movies than learn from real-life experiences. what text do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, many
people
 assert that
due to
 advancements in ,technology there are numerous ways of learning through movies , the internet and books ,
while
 the rest of
people
 opine that real-life experiments make major changes for learning something new.I believe that real experience will teach us more as compared to other sources . The first and foremost reason is that
people
 will learn better through their life challenges, they will learn from mistakes;
for example
, my cousin was drug addicted, and he went to several rehabilitation centres to get rid of
this
 habit ,but it did not work at all.One day her mother tried to commit suicide because of his bad habits.when he saw his mother dying ,he never repeat
this
 mistake again.Now he is working as a normal human being, which means to say
people
 learn better from their mistakes.
In addition
,sometimes stories in books
as well as
 in movies could not be real ;it could have negative effects on children because ,In these days, most pictures are based on crime and violence;
therefore
, youngsters will try to opt for the same behaviour without knowing its ill effects.
For instance
, pattern Hindi movie is extremely popular these days ,youngsters make Tiktok, and reels by copying the same dance moves on social media , how which could be better for youth. In conclusion, no doubt , many
people
 think that learning through movies
as well as
 from books is better ,but
according to
 my,
perspective
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 real incidents would bring more advantages in order to learn from mistakes for becoming better human beings and for developing good behaviour.
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