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The bar chart shows the numbers of cars per 1000 people in 5 European countries in three years and compaire with European everages.

The bar chart shows the numbers of cars per 1000 people in 5 European countries in three years and compaire with European everages.
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The graph presents car ownership for every 1000
people
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 in five different Europe
countries
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 and compares it with the average of Europeans in three different years (2005, 2009, and 2015). It is clear from the chart that
people
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 who live in
Country
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 1 had fewer
cars
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 than the other four
countries
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, and the residents of
Country
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 5 owned more
cars
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 than the other four
countries
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 and the European average.
People
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 in
country
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 4 owned the same number of
cars
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 in three survey years, seven persons had
cars
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 in every ten persons.
Country
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 2, 3 and 5 changed slightly, only
Country
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 1 had a remarkable disparity.
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, in 2015 residents in
Countries
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 2 and 5 owned more
cars
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 than ten years ago, meanwhile, the number of
cars
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 decreased from 700 to 590 in
Country
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 3 in the survey period. In 2015, almost every resident in
Country
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 5 had
cars
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, in comparison,
people
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 less than 40 per cent in
Country
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 1 owned
cars
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 per thousand. In the other three
countries
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, at least 50 per cent of
people
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 had
cars
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, countries, country, cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Stability
  • Significant
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Average
  • Comparison
  • Fluctuations
  • Steady
  • Surge
  • Dip
  • Outperform
  • Lag behind
  • Demographic factors
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Mobility demand
  • Environmental concerns
  • Policy implications
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