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The diagram details the process of making smoked fish. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram details the process of making smoked fish. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The flowchart depicts the essential steps in producing smoke
fish
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. Those processes will be divided into two primary steps: producing smoke
fish
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 and delivering
to
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it to
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 the
fishmarket
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fish market
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. The whole production
is
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started with the manufacturing of smoked
fish
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.
Initially
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, fresh
fish
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 are unloaded from
net
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a net
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 in the sea which is
being
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put in the boat. After
processed
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processing
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further
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 in the port, the
fish
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 get to be
freezed
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frozen
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in
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for
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 a long time to prevent expiry date. Afterwards, the
fish
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 will
be thaw
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be thawed
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 in
a
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apply
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fresh water and cut with a knife.
Further
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, it needs to be
sinked
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linked
 in
a
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apply
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salt water
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saltwater
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 and should be
colored
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coloured
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 using yellow as a food
additives
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additive
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 to attract consumers. After
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being colored
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colored
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colouring
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, the
fish
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 need to be smoked. At the subsequent stage, the
fish
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 is packaged and
freezed
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frozen
 at 0 degrees. After
freezed
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freezing
freeze
, the
fish
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 is kept in the cold store to reduce the expiry date. The
fish
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 get to be distributed by truck. Eventually, the
fish
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 is ready to be sold.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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