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The graph below show the number of hours spent on social media per day from 2010 to 2016 as well as the reasons why they used them. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

The graph below show the number of hours spent on social media per day from 2010 to 2016 as well as the reasons why they used them. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
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The charts provide information about daily
hours
 spent on four online platforms from 2010 to 2016,
as well as
 the percentage of usage reasons.
Overall
, it is evident that screen time on all channels fluctuated over the six-year period, particularly
Instagram
. Meanwhile, Snapchat remained the most popular application throughout the given years, except for 2014. In fact, these platforms were mainly used for communication purposes.
According to
 the line graph, in 2010, people spent their time on Snapshot the longest, with 5
hours
 per day, followed by Facebook,
Instagram
 and LinkedIn. The trend in all cases had been
upwards
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 until 2012 when Facebook gained more involvement over the next two years, surpassing its Snapchat counterpart in 2014.
However
, by the end of 2016, Facebook
finally
 lost its screen time, ranking third behind Snapchat and
Instagram
. LinkedIn's
hours
 spent were still far behind the others. Interestingly, the screen
hours
 on
Instagram
 experienced an extreme fluctuation
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which there was a spike in 2012 to around 4.5
hours
.
Nevertheless
, the figure drastically plummeted to under 2
hours
 in 2014
,
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 and
then
 surged to reach its new peak
at
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 almost 5
hours
 in 2016. In terms of usage, almost two-thirds (58%) of the total goes towards communication, and approximately a quarter (23%) was for shopping,
while
 the rest is spent on other entertainment purposes
such
 as playing games and watching videos.
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