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Some people believe that charities should help people in need no matter where those people are in the world,Others feel that these organizations should only serve the people living in the country where they are based Discuss both sides and give your own view.

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Some
people
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 believe that charities should help
people
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 in need no
matter
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 where those
people
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 are in the
world
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. Others feel that these organizations should only serve the
people
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 living in the
country
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 where they are based.
however
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, I support that Some
people
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 believe that charities should help
people
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 in need no
matter
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 where those
people
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 are in the
world
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. on the one hand, charities should help
people
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 in need no
matter
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 where those
people
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 are in the
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 and have some advantages .
firstly
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 when a
charity
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country
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 gives other
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 financial help it can promote the status of a
charity
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country
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 and
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 give other
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 a good impression.
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, financial help will help other
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 develop their infrastructure and
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 improve their economic development.
on the other hand
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, blindly helping
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 in need
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 will cause some problems. if helping
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 use
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 money in useless places, it will cause financial waste.
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, if a
charity
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country
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 helps other
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 long time, the helping
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 will form immoderate reliance,and it will lead
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country
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's financial burden.
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 ,a
charity
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country
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 should promote their
country
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's infrastructure priority ,for example, a
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country
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 should invest money in educational resources and health facilities development because the
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 has the responsibility to make sure every child has a chance to educate.
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, the most important task is the
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 need ensure the happiness of citizen in their own
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 and promote social all-round development. in conclusion, I think
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countries
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 should ensure their own citizen well-being superiority,and help
people
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 in need no
matter
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 where those
people
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 are in the
world
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.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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