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It is important for children to learn how to distinguish between right and wrong by carrying out punishments you agree or disagree with this ?

#children #right #punishments
Just as
children
 receive rewards to reinforce good deeds or house chores well done, they should
likewise
 be allowed to serve
punishments
 when they are wrong or do something bad. I agree with
this
 assertion and
further
 reasons would be
expantiated
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expatiated
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expiated
 on to support my argument.
Punishments
 are meant to correct and reform
ones
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 character when there's a deviation from what is socially acceptable.
Moreover
, knowing when to initiate the use of
such
punishments
 goes a long way to perform
it's
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 job. I think
,
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 before
a
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punishment is
metted
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meted
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 out the age of the child should be considered.
This
 will help to achieve our aim,
for instance
 giving a two years old 5 strokes of
cane
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 as a form of rewarding him/her for something wrong done will not attain a positive outcome.
This
 child does not understand the gravity of the
offense
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 committed nor the strokes of
cane
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 received.
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 there are different forms of
punishments
 and rewards which I think
parents
 and guardians should learn in order to bring out the best
their
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children
. Gone are the days when
parents
 could be seen exerting so much strength in whipping their kids for one wrong or the other. In recent years,
parents
 are more likely to deny
children
of
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what they love as a form of punishment or
giving
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 the kids time-outs which
helps
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 to shape their character. I think
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as much as we want to help these
children
 grow to become the best versions of themselves, we must put in measures to prevent some
parents
 and guardians from going overboard. There should be laws by governments to punish them too.
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