It is important for children to learn how to distinguish between right and wrong by carrying out punishments you agree or disagree with this ?

#children #right #punishments

Just as

children

receive rewards to reinforce good deeds or house chores well done, they should

likewise

be allowed to serve

punishments

when they are wrong or do something bad. I agree with

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assertion and

further

reasons would be

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Punishments

are meant to correct and reform

ones

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character when there's a deviation from what is socially acceptable.

Moreover

, knowing when to initiate the use of

such

punishments

goes a long way to perform

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job. I think

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before

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punishment is

metted

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meted

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out the age of the child should be considered.

This

will help to achieve our aim,

for instance

giving a two years old 5 strokes of

cane

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as a form of rewarding him/her for something wrong done will not attain a positive outcome.

This

child does not understand the gravity of the

offense

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committed nor the strokes of

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received.

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there are different forms of

punishments

and rewards which I think

parents

and guardians should learn in order to bring out the best

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children

. Gone are the days when

parents

could be seen exerting so much strength in whipping their kids for one wrong or the other. In recent years,

parents

are more likely to deny

children

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what they love as a form of punishment or

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the kids time-outs which

helps

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to shape their character. I think

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as much as we want to help these

children

grow to become the best versions of themselves, we must put in measures to prevent some

parents

and guardians from going overboard. There should be laws by governments to punish them too.

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