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Major cities have become too big and overcrowded. Why is this the case? What are some possible solutions to this?

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Due to
 urbanisation most of the megacities have become more crowded. I strongly believe that the main
problems
 are the few residential
facilities
 and government
services
 and the rise in the unemployment rate.
Firstly
, the main cause of immigration from rural to the cities is fewer residential
facilities
 and authority
services
.
In other words
, when
people
 move from the outskirts they might find some
problems
 finding a place to their accommodation because big societies do not have enough
facilities
 for everyone.
For example
, when my relative immigrated to Tehran the capital city of Iran faced much different trouble to find a place to live.
Secondly
,
this
 might make much trouble for the government too. On the one hand, they must improve their
services
 to cover all walks of life in society,
on the other hand
, they must come with no big budget to facilitate urban areas in all communities.
For instance
, the government should create more train stations and buses to present better transportation
services
.
In addition
, to the first problem that I mentioned in the previous ,paragraph I do believe the rise in the unemployment percentage is another cause that societies experience
due to
 becoming overcrowded megacities.
That is
 to say, if the urban area becomes more populated it will lead to fewer job opportunities for all walks of life.
For instance
, with an increase in
this
 trend line finding an empty seat in big towns has become a laborious task for everyone because there are a lot of candidates for a job. In terms of tackling these
problems
 the governments should put some rules on the table to restrict
people
 from immigrating some rules
such
 as paying more taxes if they want to change their accommodations
Moreover
, the limitation of places that
people
 can live in is another solution to eliminate these
problems
. In conclusion, In the number of cities pollution of humanity is causing many
problems
such
 as fewer
facilities
 for
people
 to use and growth in the rate of the unemployment rate.
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