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The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with data opened, kilometers of route and passenger numbers per year in millions.

The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with data opened, kilometers of route and passenger numbers per year in millions.
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The presented table
illustrators
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 information about, underground railway networks among six categorized countries, units are measured in millions. From an
overall
 perspective, it is
clearly
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 that the oldest underground users are significantly more compared to the newest.
To begin
 with,
London
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the London
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 railway station oldest
this
 one in the table, open it in 1863, and
also
 wider 394
kilometers
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 of
route
.
Secondly
, Paris is
considering
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most
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common
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using
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 the underground network,
whereas
kilometers
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kilometres
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 of
route
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the route
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a
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 equivalent
around
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half
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 size of the London. Eventually,
the
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Tokyo
is
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indicated 1928 million passengers in a year and
this
 measures more than
other
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the other
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 given five countries.
On the other hand
, Tokyo is most lower
kilometers
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kilometres
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 of
route
, and passengers per year compared to Washington DC and Los Angeles. Most
brights
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 and
colorful
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 City Los Angeles
operating
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 in 2001, and
level
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 of lines
about
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 twice times more compared to
two
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 newest countries.
In addition
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the difference
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difference
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 between passengers are slightly wider.
Furthermore
, Washington DC is extensive with 126
kilometers
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kilometres
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 of
route
 compared to only 11 and 28
kilometers
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kilometres
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.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • underground railway systems
  • kilometers of route
  • passenger numbers per year
  • millions
  • significance
  • historical context
  • correlate
  • infrastructure
  • efficiency
  • tourist traffic
  • correlation analysis
  • investment
  • municipal
  • expanding
  • usage
  • trends
  • observed
  • impact
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