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Some people believe that clothes we wear to work affect how productive we are. Write a for and against essay.

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In our daily lives clothing has a significant impact on how we feel, act and
work
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.
Productivity
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 means a lot when it comes to a normal and boring
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 day and the way we are dressed influence directly our mood.
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, many people believe that it is not affordable following day by day a
dress
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 code which maybe might stop expressing their inner side using different combinations of clothes. One clear advantage is that a well defined
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 code helps people to separe the leisure time from
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 time. That’s why the
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 goes on when it comes to dressing smartly and looking freshly.
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, huge holdings in the
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 decades are more looking for improvements in their companies
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 as:
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 codes, wellbeing of a one employee and so on. Those rules would help them to maintain the focus and stability in the employees’ ranks. The positive effects of
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 covers the both sides: the employees and the employers. With
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 an improvement the companies look more proficient and there is
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 accessibility for workers to put their body into
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.
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, the most obvious drawback to
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 codes is that it stops workers to express their full potential and to play with different styles to experiment and expand their horizons. As stated in one study from 2019, employees who say that they are more productive when the
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 code is relaxed are around 60%, more than people who hardly believe in template rules when it comes to
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 codes. It is
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 important to remember that
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 is ruled by our subconscious mind and how we feel at the moment
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, science does not yet have evidence in
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 regard. In conclusion, I would agree that there is ample evidence suggesting that the clothes we wear to
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 play a significant role in our
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.
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 the exact causal relationship may vary, attire influences our confidence, professionalism, and psychological well-being, all of which impact our effectiveness in the workplace.
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