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There is a moral necessity today for the richer countries of the world to help the poorer countries develop in terms of feeding the population, education and healthcare.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The world today is often divided into two parts, more developed and less developed .Some people believe that to minimize
this
 gap , richer
countries
 should help the poor
nations
 in terms of health,wealth and education. I completely accord with the writer's notion and the reason for my inclination is articulated in the trial paragraph. One school of thought , the level of the gap between the two
nations
 will incline in future if richer
countries
 will not help the poor
nations
.
However
 to reduce
this
 gap wealthy
countries
 should contribute by providing basic necessities to poor
nations
. There are some
countries
 that are less developed and suffering from food crises and have fewer medical facilities. To cite an example, Pakistan is facing deprivation for many years so, there nearer developed nation China can help them by providing some food. Not only
this
 but
also
 richer
nations
 can invest in
this
 kind of country to overcome
such
 a crisis. Opposing
this
 is the view that each country is in charge of their own inhabitants and
therefore
 that they need to provide health, wealth and education by taking the help of other
countries
 who are well developed.
Moreover
, richer
nations
 can
also
 provide some education facilities which not only improve literacy rate but
also
 increase employment.
Although
,
such
 help can overcome the problem of the poorer
nations
 regarding basic things.
To conclude
, it is great if wealthy
countries
 can help developing
countries
 because humanity should always be the main cause but it is
also
 the responsibility of the government to look after their nation.
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