The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two chart graphs illustrate the percentage of how many households
owned
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electrical appliances for chores and how many
hours
they spent on housework per week in one country from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
,
it is clear that
electrical appliances became common in the given timeframe,
therefore
total
hours
spent on doing housekeeping work significantly dropped.
Also
, the percentage of households equipped with refrigerators increased
rapidly
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than washing machine and vacuum cleaner owners.
As for the
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The
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first graph which shows the percentage of families with domestic electrical appliances refrigerator owners drastically went up, almost 3% in 1920 but 90% in 1960. Houses with refrigerators took up 100% in 1980, and
finally
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,finally
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all
family
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families
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had it.
Next,
vacuum cleaner buyers
,
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began at 30% in 1920, but slowly rose to 100% in 2000.
Lastly
, families who had washing
machine
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machines
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inflated until 1960 by 30%
,
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but slightly fall in 1980 to 65%. But the number of washing machine owners started buying more in
80s
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the 80s
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, so more than 60% of people ended up having it in 2019. In terms of the number of the second graph, the total number of
hours
of housework per week, per household began
with
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at
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50
hours
in 1920 but ended with approximately 18
hours
in 1970. From 1970 to 2019, the total length of time for chores remained constant, around 15
hours
. In 2019, the figure reached
at
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the
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lowest, which was nearly 12
hours
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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