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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foregin language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country . Others say that these are not the only reasons ehy somrone should learn a foreign language

#people #reason #foregin #language #travel #work #country #ehy #somrone
One of the most controversial issues around the world is learning
new
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language
.Meanwhile,some
people
 think,
people
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,people
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 learn
new
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 foreign
language
 just
for
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to
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 travel or work abroad.
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 group believe there are many other reasons that
people
 tend to learn
second
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a second
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language
.I partially agree with
second
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 group and in
this
 essay,I will discuss both with some examples. On the one hand,
first
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 group think
acquisition
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the acquisition
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 of new
language
 can be hard and
people
 just
in particular
 condition want to learn it.The reason is that
,
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people
,
also
,in recent decades have
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inclination to emigrate to foreign countries and they learn
new
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a new
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language
 to find better job opportunities.Travel,
in addition
,can be another
further
 reason that
people
 want to learn it.
For example
,my cousin,loves japan and its culture and he always
travel
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 to japan.because of that he started to learn their
languages
 to be able to communicate with
japanese
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Japanese
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 easily.
On the other hand
,there are many other factors that persuade
people
 to
learning
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learn
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 new
languages
.
Firstly
,advancement in technology and internet help
people
 to communicate with
wide
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a wide
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 variety of
people
 with different culture and
languages
.As we know,communication has no border,
For example
,
people
 these days,have contact with
people
 around the world
in
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on
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instagram
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Instagram
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 and Facebook.
Additionaly
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Additionally
,most of the important article and news are translate to the
intenational
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international
languages
such
 as English and many graduated or scientist have to read them to enhance their knowledge and they have to learn foreign
languages
.
Furthermore
,for many
people
,learning a new
language
 is like
hobby
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 and they want to learn other
languages
 just like playing tennis or cycling.
To sum up
,In my perspective,it is ingrained in our characteristic to keep learning or discovering new things.
Besides
,In
modern
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 era,we need to learn numerous abilities to be able to handle our daily needs,especially learning
foreign
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a foreign
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language
.
This days
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 on of the most important criteria of skilled
people
is
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are
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 knowing
other
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another language
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language
.
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