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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foregin language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country . Others say that these are not the only reasons ehy somrone should learn a foreign language

#people #reason #foregin #language #travel #work #country #ehy #somrone
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One of the most controversial issues around the world is learning
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.Meanwhile,some
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people
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 learn
new
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 foreign
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 just
for
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 travel or work abroad.
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 group believe there are many other reasons that
people
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.I partially agree with
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 group and in
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 essay,I will discuss both with some examples. On the one hand,
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 group think
acquisition
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the acquisition
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 of new
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 can be hard and
people
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 just
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 condition want to learn it.The reason is that
,
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people
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,
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,in recent decades have
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inclination to emigrate to foreign countries and they learn
new
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 to find better job opportunities.Travel,
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,can be another
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people
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 want to learn it.
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,my cousin,loves japan and its culture and he always
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 to japan.because of that he started to learn their
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 to be able to communicate with
japanese
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Japanese
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 easily.
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,there are many other factors that persuade
people
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 to
learning
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 new
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.
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,advancement in technology and internet help
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 to communicate with
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 variety of
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 with different culture and
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.As we know,communication has no border,
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,
people
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 these days,have contact with
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 around the world
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instagram
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 and Facebook.
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,most of the important article and news are translate to the
intenational
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international
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 as English and many graduated or scientist have to read them to enhance their knowledge and they have to learn foreign
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.
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,for many
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,learning a new
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 is like
hobby
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 and they want to learn other
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 just like playing tennis or cycling.
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,In my perspective,it is ingrained in our characteristic to keep learning or discovering new things.
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,In
modern
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 era,we need to learn numerous abilities to be able to handle our daily needs,especially learning
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language
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This days
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 on of the most important criteria of skilled
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is
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 knowing
other
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another language
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language
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.
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