The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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pie chart depicts information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. It is clear
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from
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that is
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a predect
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predict
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population
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the population
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btween
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between
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country
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. According
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is shown, we can see
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population
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the population
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of Yemen in 2000 young
people
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had half ratio
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%,
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adult
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adults
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46.3%,
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and old
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people
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had the lowest ratio in the community
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%.
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Yemen in 2050 the
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population
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change
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changes
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, young
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adult
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adults
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57.3
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%,
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and 5.7old
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people
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.
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of Italy in 2000
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adult
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adults
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had a big proportion
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of 61.6
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%, old
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24.1% ,
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people
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14.3%, but
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population
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the population
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of Italy in 2050
change
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changed
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adult
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adults
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46.2%, old
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42.3% , young
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11.5%.
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, we could say
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a big
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challenge
change
for tow county.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, people, adult with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • population distribution
  • age group
  • population pyramid
  • projections
  • young population
  • aging population
  • demographic shift
  • increase in elderly population
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • population dynamics
  • top-heavy
  • balanced age distribution
  • healthcare needs
  • pension provision
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