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In recent years, responsible tourists have paid attention to preserving both the culture and the environment of the place they visit. However, some people say that it is impossible to be a responsible tourist. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, it is considered that foreigners' responsibilities in protecting both the culture and the environment
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 the places where they are
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are being paid attention
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In contrast
, several people convey that there is no possible way to be a responsible
tourist
. In my personal opinion, I strongly disagree with
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 statement, as
tourist
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 should understand their personal choice
as well as
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sense
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 of
possesion
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possession
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To begin
 with, becoming a responsible
tourist
 is a personal choice in order to respect the local traditions and cultures.
For example
,
tourist
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tourists
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 folks who are coming from
Western
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a Western
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country
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, when they want to
visit
 Eastern
country
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, mainly temples,
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should grasp the local rules before entering them. Wearing a sarong,
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 appropriately, tie their long hair are vast sums of nice examples of respecting the local culture.
Therefore
, if tourists are aware
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 small things
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 in their
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, becoming a
responsibility
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tourist
 will be not a challenging demand.
Secondly
, the tourists are supposed to have
strong
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 feeling of
possesion
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possession
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 the places they
visit
.
This
 feeling leads to
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the responsibilty
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responsibilty
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responsibility
 of
tourist
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tourists
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 to keep the cleanliness of the places they
visit
.
For instance
, if they
visit
 new temples and they fall in love with the exquisite scenery around
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, admire how green it is, and spend plenty of time in
this
 place, they will be connected with
this
 place.
As a result
, they will not make any harmful things
such
 as
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 rubbish recklessly
,
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 and feel guilty when they are unable to keep the area
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 more beautiful. In conclusion,
while
 other people say it is impossible to be a responsible
tourist
,
however
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 there are two major acknowledgements that can help
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 the tourists' responsibilities.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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