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The news plays an important role in most people's lives. Why is the news is so important to people? why is so much news dedicated to the bad news? Should the news focus on good instead

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In
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 concurrent era, there are different ways to deliver information to society. But the most popular and important one is
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news
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the news
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. There are some reasons behind
importance
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the importance
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 and showing negative
news
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instead
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 of both good and bad. I will discuss
about
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 in forthcoming paragraphs. To commence with the pros of
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The first
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 and
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foremost is that
news
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 help to connect the world. They provide
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information about happenings
of
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all around the world.
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 that people can understand the problems or events that occurred or will take place in future.
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 of
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, some
channels
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 prefer to telecast only bad
news
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. The main reason behind
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 is that they just want to incline their channel TRP (Television Rating Point). So that they can earn more and their channel would be famous on TV. To exemplify
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the Majority
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 of
channels
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 do not like to show the scientific developments done by country scientists rather than they would show
,
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if
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it if
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 something negative
done
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was done
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 by celebrities. They describe thoroughly about that case. So
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 lot of spectators would watch their
channels
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.
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,
news
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channels
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 should telecast both good
or
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and
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 bad
news
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 as they have their own importance. Great
news
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 encourages others to work more for their nation as well and negative
news
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 would teach a lesson and aware the audience. True
news
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channels
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 and anchors are always appreciated by others. When
take
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balance
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 in their
news
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.
To conclude
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apply
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this
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,
news
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channels
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 are
most
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the most
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 important sector to know about world events. It is their duty to provide every
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piece of information
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, even
it
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if it
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 is good or bad.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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