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Q: UNIVERSITIES SHOULD ACCEPT EQUAL NUMBERS OF MALE AND FEMALE STUDENTS IN EVERY SUBJECT . TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE ?

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Some people think that tertiary education centres should take in
students
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 of both genders in equal numbers in every subject, so as to promote
gender
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 equality. I,
however
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, strongly disagree with
this
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 concept, as the intake of
students
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 should base on their
interests
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 and not their
gender
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.
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, it is unfair for
students
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 as certain subjects attract one
gender
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 more than the other. First of all, the reason why I think it is incorrect is that universities should accept
students
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according to
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 their
interests
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, despite their
gender
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. The selection of
students
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 should take into account the student's results and
interests
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instead
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 of their
gender
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. As we can predict,if universities are required to take in equal numbers of male and female
students
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 into each subject, it will result in some
students
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 being not able to enter the courses they like, as they have to face tough competition for certain subjects that are
gender
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-specific.
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, some subjects attract the interest of certain
gender
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.
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, in the university where I study, engineering mainly attracts male
students
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while
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nursing
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the nursing
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 study has more female
students
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. It would be unfair for the
students
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 if the university is forced to accept the same number of
students
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 of both
gender
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, as it would result in some male
students
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 being unable to enter engineering, and vice versa for female
students
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 getting into nursing. It will inevitably cause stress and feeling of injustice, and eventually, they might drop out
due to
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 a lack of interest in the subject that they are not keen to take from the beginning. In summary, I deeply disagree with universities taking in
students
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 based on their
gender
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 , and not their
interests
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. If selection is made purely on
gender
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, it will create a generation of youngsters who might be not interested in their courses, eventually resenting going to university.
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