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The environmental problems that today's world is facing are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situation. So governments and large organizations should be responsible for reducing the amount of damage being done to the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#world #people #situation #governments #organizations #amount #damage #environment
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last
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 two decades, It has been noticed that global warming is
a
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 biggest problem we all are facing.To overcome
this
 issue some industries and authorities are playing a vital role.
However
, they are not only responsible to take a fight with
this
 damage.
Therfore
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Therefore
,
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the awarness
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awarness
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awareness
 of individual citizens
is arise
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. In my opinion, together, governments and big firms
along with
 the support of local people can achieve it.
To begin
 with, we are facing a number of problems
due to
 pollution which is produced by manufacturing companies and with the demand
of
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 new infrastructure and
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the developmnet
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developmnet
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development
 of science. The
waste
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come
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 from
such
 units
are
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is
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 harming our nature and
a
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apply
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devastating situations arise.
Thus
, to decline
this
 dangerous
waste
 which affects
health
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the health
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 of human being, animals and birds,
government
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the government
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 has announced certain policies which
is
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 compulsory to follow by industrialists.
For instance
, if
organizations
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organization
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 is creating
chemical
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chemicals
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then
there
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their
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waste
 can not be thrown in water
boddies
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bodies
 and the air should be
filterised
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filtered
 before going out.
In addition
, with the help of
mordern
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modern
 technology, some
machineries
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machinery
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available
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is available
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 with firms which
delluting
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diluting
deleting
depleting
 chemical water and air before
waste
 goes out from
company
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the company
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.
Hence
, government bodies and organizations are playing a role like
a roots
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roots
a root
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 to save the environment.
Moreover
,
new
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the new
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life style
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lifestyle
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 of individuals
are
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also
genrating
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generating
 a large amount of global
waste
.
Clothes
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 they are using
is
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are
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 made with fabric and to make fabric chemical usage is increased which results
to
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 pollution.
Due to
fashion
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the fashion
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 fiesta, people are purchasing more and more clothes and
this situations
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this situation
these situations
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 arise.
Also
, plastic bags and containers
has
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biggest
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the biggest
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 market as it is cheaper in cost and easy to carry.
Although
,
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apply
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general
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the general
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 public is aware
about
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it's
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 downside, they are using it
due to
 its advantages.
However
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this things
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this thing
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 should be controlled and it can be possible with individual steps only.
Along with
this
, the fast food and new food habits developed
is
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are
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 damaging our
life
 cycle.
Therefore
, it is time
where
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when
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 all of us should
awake
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wake
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and
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up and
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 take
a
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apply
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small but
meaningfull
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meaningful
 steps to decrease environmental
pollutions
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pollution
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 and save our mother planet earth as it is the only planet where
life
 is possible. To conclude, if we want to have
healthy
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a healthy
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life
 and
to
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leave a wealthy environment for
new
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the new
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 generation it is the right time to wake up. Not only, authorities but
also
 individuals should participate to fight with devastating global warming situation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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