Many people/students today are choosing to live and work in another country after graduating from university in their home country. Why is this? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
Many
people
or students believes
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believe
if
they live or Correct word choice
apply
work
in another country
it can make they can grow up more and get more experiences
after graduating from university in Fix the agreement mistake
experience
home
Correct pronoun usage
their home
country
. Because there are a lot of things to learn if we stay in another
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another place
other places
places
. There are many advantages
if we live or work
in another country
and it must be
more outweigh the Unnecessary verb
apply
disadvantages
.
The advantages
for
staying in other Change preposition
of
places
beside
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besides
home
Correct article usage
the home
country
after graduating from university is
more than the Correct subject-verb agreement
are
disadvantages
, people
or students mostly looking
for something bigger for their life when they finished college. Wrong verb form
look
The fresh
Correct article usage
Fresh
graduated
can get a job in their Change the form of the verb
graduate
home
country
, but some people
thinks
if they just stay in their Change the verb form
think
home
, people
can’t get enough of
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apply
experiences
or more money for their life. Fix the agreement mistake
experience
For example
, if people
working
in Wrong verb form
work
a
hospitality in Remove the article
apply
home
Add an article
the home
country
, they just
stuck Add a missing verb
are just
with
the same place with the same job and maybe they can even grow up. So many Change preposition
in
people
or students decided to go to another country
for
live or Change preposition
to
work
because there are many advantages
beside
the Replace the word
besides
disadvantages
.
If there are the
Correct article usage
apply
advantages
, so there’s
the Change the verb form
there are
disadvantages
if we live or work
in another country
, but the negative things about lived
in other Change the form of the verb
living
places
in the world not
that much than the Add a missing verb
are not
advantages
. The fresh
Correct article usage
Fresh
graduated
must Replace the word
graduates
be
want to Unnecessary verb
apply
spent
their time with family or friends in Change the verb
spend
home
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the home
country
. For example
, some people
can’t be far away with
their family or friends they have. And if Change preposition
from
people
decided to live or work
in other places
, they have to be ready to be far away with
their life in Change preposition
from
home
Correct pronoun usage
their home
country
. And the other disadvantages
is we have to learn something new Fix the agreement mistake
disadvantage
with
the Change preposition
about
country
that we want to live in.
To live or work
in other
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another country
other countries
country
when graduated
in Wrong verb form
graduating
home
Correct pronoun usage
their home
country
is a good thing when people
want to get more experiences
or maybe get a better job with more money. But they have to be ready when they decided to go to Fix the agreement mistake
experience
another
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another place
other places
places
. People
have to learn something new, and they have to be far away with
their family or friends in their Change preposition
from
home
.Fix the agreement mistake
homes
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