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Some people think that there should be some strict controls about noise. Others think that they could just make as much noise as they want. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Some
people
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 hold the belief that it is imperative to impose stringent regulations
about
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noise
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 pollution.
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 the opponents think that they could create as much
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on
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 their own volition, I argue that the authority should take the lead to prevent
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 matter from getting worse. On the one hand,
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people
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 make
noise
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 deliberately or unknowingly, it can be seen that
noise
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 is ubiquitous, especially in megacities.
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,
noise
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 can be created by public vehicles, the deafening sound of domestic violence in some houses, or even the voice of
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neighbor
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 who loves to sing karaoke at home. The
noise
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 creators perceive these activities as trivial, so they will never count them as a problem. Some
people
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 who are exposed to different nuances of
noise
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 must feel irritated,
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, few of them have the courage to contact the local authority for aid. On the flip side, I hold a firm opinion that the government should impose some stringent regulations to deter
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 phenomenon.
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, only when the legislation comes into force,
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 quality of the
residents
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 lives get better.
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, if college students need a quiet space for speculating on research, the decrease in
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 will help them focus on their affairs.
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, the decline in
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 pollution can lead to the gratification of foreigners who are eager to pay a visit to Vietnam. In Hochiminh City, the
noise
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 is reaching an alarming rate that fuels dissatisfaction among the visitors because they can hardly enjoy their trip. To recapitulate,
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people
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 insist on creating as much
noise
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 as they wish, I opt for lessening the
noise
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 so that dwellers and foreign visitors
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 can have the best moments in their individual lives.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • noise pollution
  • quality of life
  • noise levels
  • stress
  • disturb sleep
  • imposing legal restrictions
  • peaceful living environment
  • tolerance levels
  • personal freedom
  • business operations
  • designated quiet zones
  • commercial and industrial zones
  • urban areas
  • public awareness campaigns
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