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Write a 250-word essay for the topic: The use of social media, such as Facebook and Twitter, is replacing face-to-face contact in everyday life. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#topic #media #facebook #twitter #contact #life #outweigh
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It is true that
people
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 do not need to
contact
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 face to face with
people
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 around,
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, they can communicate via social platforms
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 as Facebook or Twitter.
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this
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 has several advantages, the drawback may be far more significant. On the one hand, there can be some minor benefits of
contact
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 with our relationship via the Internet. One possible advantage is that it has them save time and money for moving to other places to hang out and
work
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 with friends or colleagues. By way of illustrations, in the pandemic, for each health,
people
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 limit to
contact
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 in person. So, at that time, social media is a device help
people
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 to strengthen their bonds. Another beneficial effect could be that you can keep in touch and chat without caring about geographical boundaries.
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, the fact that communicating with each other via Facebook can have major downsides which overshadow these positive impacts. The most obvious issue could be that nowadays, it is necessary to
contact
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 face-to-face with
people
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 for their
work
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. So if they stay many hours in front of the screen for their meeting
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, it not only causes damage to our health but
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 less quality of
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. Another drawback worth mentioning is that because of the convenience of social media,
people
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 become lazier in communicating with others, they prefer to use chat boxes or voice messages, for a long period, which may form less feeling in their relationships. In conclusion, despite the potential benefits of
contact
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 with social media, the drawbacks involved are of greater significance.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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