Nowadays rural people are moving to urban areas because of modern facilities and to have career opportunities but due to these urban areas people face problems.

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Nowadays rural
people
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are moving to urban
areas
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because of modern facilities and to have career
opportunities
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but
due to
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these urban
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areas
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people
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face
problems
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. In
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technological ,era there are many internet sources like mobile phones, personal computers, laptops etc from which mobile phones are commonly used by everyone even in rural
areas
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.
People
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from rural
areas
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are taking advantage of these sources and getting to know about everything which can be useful for them. For ,instance Compared literacy rate of the olden days in rural
areas
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has been increasing day by day.
People
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are getting educated and doing respected jobs in MNCs,hospitals, and schools in
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urban
areas
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to have a better life. In order to save the travelling expenses
people
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are shifting to metropolitan cities and
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for facilities which they cannot find in rural
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.
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, population growth has been increasing rapidly and
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outcoming many
problems
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like job
opportunities
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, accommodations etc. As we all know, India is a developing country and there are some
areas
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which are
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still under
development
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the development
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stage and
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to
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if the population goes on increasing there will be no good
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will be left for a new generation. ,
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many
people
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are already shifting abroad in order to grab
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in other countries because there are no more great
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left in their own country.
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, govt should develop the rural
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by setting up all facilities for
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such
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as building hospitals, companies etc to overcome
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problems
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.
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, if
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get new
opportunities
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in rural
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then
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we can encounter
problems
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with
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solution.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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