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The graphs below show the size of the ozone hole over Antarctica and the production of three ozone-damaging gases from 1980 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the size of the ozone hole over Antarctica and the production of three ozone-damaging gases from 1980 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graphs illustrate the information about
the
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Antarctica having
a
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 area of
crack
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a crack
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 in
ozone
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the ozone
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 layer and the manufacturing of three harmful gases for ozone between 1980 and 2000. The data is calibrated in millions and thousands. Overview, the highlighting part of these charts is that the space inclined till
last
year
 and creation of N2O
also
 rose till
last
year
.
To begin
 with
first
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 chart, in 1980, there
were
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 about 500
sequare
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square
 thousands cavity in
ozone
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the ozone
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 layer. After
that
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 it sharply grew till 1990.
While
,
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then
 its size suddenly declined after 4 years.
However
, it started increasing again and reached
to
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nearly 4000 square Km in 2000. Moving
further
 to another chart, production of CFC-11 initiated from 70
tonnes
from
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 1980 and it remained stable till
next
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the next
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 three years. But, later to that it fall dramatically and nearly touched 10
tonnes
 in
last
year
. Despite
this
,
making
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 of CFC-12 was about 25
tonnes
 in
initial
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year
, it crossed only 10
tonnes
 more after two decades.
Finally
, N2O manufacturing started
from
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 1990 and
reamined
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remained
 below from 30 till 2000.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words year, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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