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Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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Nowadays, mobile phones have become necessary things in our life. Not only for grown-ups but
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 for
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 too. They usually spend time with
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 device for a long time every day. As a matter of fact, we can not deny that smartphones play an important role in our
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's daily life. It can entertain our
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 after a long day of studying;
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, it contains a lot of various content
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 as movies, games, chats, and social media to name but a few. They can completely spend a day on their phone without running off stuff to do. The parents can
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 change the settings about the content age,
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 the
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 will still be on their watch, and they do not have to worry about their
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 learning inappropriate things;
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, they still have to teach what is wrong and right so their
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 will really understand the reason.
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, some people
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 say that mobile phones can
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 improve our
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' knowledge. For young
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, there are plenty of games and media that
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 provide basic information that can teach them
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 entertained.
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, Teenagers usually use a lot of applications to work and study. The world is moving forward and we have to adjust our lifestyle to go
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 it. It is not enough anymore to learn only in school or university classes,
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 the phones’ size, it is easy for us to carry them everywhere,
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 adolescents are able to learn and work anywhere and anytime. To illustrate
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, based on my own experience, it is normal for me to work and study
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 I am outside my house because if I do that, I will have more time to rest or do other homework without being stressed. In conclusion, smartphones not only benefit our
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 in the entertainment aspect but
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 develop their knowledge. In my point of view,
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 improves us in many positive ways.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • smartphones
  • usage
  • technology
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • entertainment
  • gaming
  • social media
  • communication
  • educational resources
  • addiction
  • dependence
  • negative effects
  • physical health
  • mental health
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