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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, differences between nations are getting reduced
due to
 technology and exchange trade agreements
such
 as import-export facilities,
As a
result
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 an individual from India can use the same product which American uses in their day-to-day life. In my opinion, It is in the favour of various countries rather than its demerits.
Firstly
, because of the exchange policy between the two nations, people can get high-quality
products
 from international brands. The global
market
 has opened up the door for technology to develop and its usage.
Thus
, an individual from India has the same knowledge that American or europian have.
This
 knowledge transparency is getting boom in the world. In past, it was not easy as in recent times.
For example
, a person sitting in Dubai is having same Apple laptop which a Canadian person is using.
Secondly
, some global brands are opening their manufacturing units in developing nations.
This
 creates employment. If earnings and quality of
products
 increase in the
market
, people can develop their lifestyles.
For instance
, Apple, Jhonsons, Nike, Zara and many more provide quality
products
.
Due to
 increasing demand for their
products
, they need to do more and more production. To increase production, they are opening their units and offices in various countries.
Last
 but not the least, the Global
market
 inspires local manufacturers rather than demotivates them. It provides them with the area to explore them by improving the quality of
products
 at low prices.
Although
 a few business personnel argued because of competition, others developed their
products
 and
also
 booked global awards in the industry.
To conclude
, Despite having one or two demerits, the global
market
 is having various phenomenal benefits. That results in lifestyle improvement, economic development and knowledge enhancement.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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