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Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects.Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Leaving in the computer era, it is argued that some
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 are much more worth it to study rather than
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. I completely agree with
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 definitely something to be said for being taught to students.
This
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 subject demonstrates what has happened to our ancestors and their previous ancestors, and
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 the reason why it is a substantial course teaching crucial lessons of
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 to us.
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,
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 is like a repeatable cycle with some
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, the more you are familiar with these rules, the more you are on a path
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 success in your
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.
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this
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 is a sensible, undeniable claim, I believe that some practical
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 and
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 play a more vital role in today's world.
On the other hand
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, it is claimed that
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 like
Science
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 and
Technology
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 should be valued over
History
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due to
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 two reasons. First and foremost, these
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 are much more practical and beneficial in our everyday lives. We inevitably need these experimental
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 to fulfil great accomplishments to have
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, healthy and easier
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.
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,
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 like
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Technology
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 are alive, flexible sciences that need to be explored and developed consistently.
By contrast
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,
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 is a narrative,
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 and exploration; which is why I believe
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 has never been as important as
Science
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 or
Technology
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. In conclusion,
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 some people think that
History
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 is the most important subject, and even more crucial than
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 and
Technology
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, I believe that it can never be as substantial as those
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 in terms of being useful and practical.

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task response
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction. This helps the reader understand your position right away.
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Try to connect your ideas more smoothly with linking words, like 'firstly', 'secondly', or 'in conclusion'. This will guide the reader through your essay.
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Include more specific examples to support your points. For instance, mention specific technologies that have transformed society, or historical events that teach important lessons.
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The essay presents a clear opinion on the topic, which is important for a good response.
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Your argument about the practicality of Science and Technology is well-explained and relevant to today's world.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural heritage
  • Historical perspective
  • Analytical skills
  • Contextual understanding
  • Technological advancements
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • Innovation
  • Interdisciplinary
  • Job market
  • Climate crisis
  • Cultural identity
  • Critical thinking
  • Humanities
  • Contemporary issues
  • Integration
  • Tech-savvy
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