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Many people believe that it is easier to have a healthy lifestyle in the countryside. Others believe that there are health benefits to living in cities. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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Lots of individuals believe that living in the countryside has more health advantages than living in
cities
. In the coming ,essay we will discuss both views and give my opinion on
this
. The majority of individuals will agree that in the agrarian site earlike there was no
air
pollution
 .
Air
 was pure and there is no noise or environmental
pollution
 .
people
 are fit and healthy as compared to counterparts living in
cities
. More
people
 will have
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healthy
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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 and healthy immunity in the country sites as compared to
people
 living in urban areas. In India, To cite an example rural peoples always have more longevity and a healthy
lifestyle
 because of exposure to clean
air
 , unadulterated food etc.
On the other hand
 ,
people
 living in
cities
 are facing health issues because of numerous issues like
pollution
 be it
air
, environment or noise. ,
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 most of the city population is
also
 having problems with a sedentary
lifestyle
 which result in an unhealthy
lifestyle
. To illustrate, In Canada,
people
 have more access to clean
air
 and an active
lifestyle
 which makes their population even in urban areas healthy and fit. More and more population in countries like Canada like to stay in the countryside
instead
 of
cities
 because of the benefits it offers.,
Moreover
 after corona pandemic, a large section of society is preferring to stay in the terrain as it offers a better healthy
lifestyle
 .
To conclude
, I am of opinion that , Most individuals are exposed to the healthy benefits of staying in a country site.
Moreover
 ,
people
 are aware of healthy lifestyles and benefits which can be derived from staying in the surroundings. Problems like
pollution
 , sedentary
lifestyle
 and adulterated food are not present in the country's site
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