In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

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Nowadays,
people
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are more inclined towards a sedentary
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and ignore their well-being in terms of health.
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,
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lifestyle
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the lifestyle
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of
people
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is getting worst day by day
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more and more
people
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are getting affected by obesity and other ailments. There are multifaceted factors which are acting as a catalyst in
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situation.
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, most
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spend more than 9 hours at the office
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sticking to the same place where they do not get any chance to be involved in any physical activities.
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that kind of situation may enhance the enormous amount of fat in their body.
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, at home parents become too much passionate about the educational development of their children that they have restrained their scions from any extracurricular tasks and bind them towards only academic activities.
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, the food which we are consuming is free from necessary nutrients
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we are only processing fats and cholesterol in our
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, we are increasingly becoming addicted to fast food and avoiding consuming fruits and vegetables in our diet
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we are getting heavily affected by obesity and coronary artery diseases. To curb
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situation society must need to step up and implement pragmatic measures to reduce the adverse effects of a detrimental
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. Awareness campaigns must need to be initiated to educate the masses about the importance of health and fitness.
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, necessary facilities need to be built up to enhance and promote recreational activities which attract the masses towards a healthy
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, society and government may help to facilitate
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by providing necessary resources but the individual is
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a responsibility
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to take care of and maintain his or her
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. In conclusion, in past years the sedentary
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which we have opted for is the primary cause of our detrimental
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. To impede its effects revolutionary changes are required in
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and continuous support from private and governmental organizations is required to counter
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problem.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • obesity
  • overweight
  • physical activity
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • exercise
  • unhealthy diet
  • fast food
  • urbanization
  • modernization
  • stress
  • awareness
  • education
  • government intervention
  • policies
  • promotion
  • sports
  • fitness programs
  • health education
  • taxation
  • public transportation
  • infrastructure
  • parks
  • recreational spaces
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