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Some employers are giving more value on hiring people with good social skills apart from good qualifications. Do you agree or disagree that social skills are just as crucial as good qualification for successful work?

#employers #value #people #skills #qualifications #qualification #work
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Although
 it is
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crucial
critical
 for
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employees
 to be able to socialize well
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 with customers, it should not be
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 that some jobs need related qualifications, as well. To my point of view
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 both sociable and qualified is needed to
fulfill
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 most of the jobs nowadays. As far as knowledge and experience is concerned, some jobs do need specialities.
For instance
, if you want to take the chance to work as a doctor you should have a degree from a university, that you have been trained as a doctor and are qualified. Regarding
this
 issue, the higher the rank of the university you studied in, the more chance you have to get better
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.
Furthermore
, being qualified and having experience on a special subject are
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crucial
critical
 to some employers and they would not take the risk of
unexperienced
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 staff, since it may
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 their credit and respect. Being able to socialize with others plays a pivotal role in
everyones'
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everyone's
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 life these days, especially if you want to take a job which is based on
this
 quality. Salesmen or online customer supports,
for example
, they need to talk and persuade customers, whether to buy their products or reassure them, that they will have good service, as support for their goods, So having an extroverted personality could be the matter of winning or losing the chance to move up the
carreer
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career
 ladder in any kind of job. In conclusion, I completely agree with the idea that
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employees
 should have special qualities
such
 as being sociable and experience in all fields they are going to work in, and
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 of which is more important than another one.
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The essay effectively presents a balanced view, addressing the importance of both social skills and qualifications.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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