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the perventage of australian men and women doing regular physical activity:2010

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The bar chart provided reveals the proportion of males and females who participated in physical activities regularly in terms of six
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 groups in Australia in 2010.
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it is clear that
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women
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 were more likely to have physical exercises regularly than men of all ages in 2010. And the participation rate of
women
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 who liked the physical exercises most was from the 45-54-year-old
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, compared to the male from 15 to 24.
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, changes in the men
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 showed a fluctuation and no too significant changes in
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. In terms of males, the percentage of the
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group
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 of 15 to 24 was the highest of all male
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 groups, with a climax at around 53%, before fell dramatically to the lowest point of merely 38.5% of the
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 aged from 35 to 44, reducing by almost 14%. The groups aged 45 to over 65 experienced a gradual rise to 46.7%.
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, 47.7% of females were around 5% lower than that
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of males
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 in the same 15 to 24
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 bracket . But, a slight climb could be seen followed, peaking at the proportion of 53.3% from the
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 of 45 to 54. There was a slight drop to the lowest place at approximately 47% of
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 over 65 years old.

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