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Children can learn effectively by watching television. therefore, they should be encouraged to watch television regularly at home and at school. to what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Nowadays, There is a lively debate that what is the effective way of learning for
children
.
While
 some individuals have thought that
due to
 the invention of ,technology efficient way of schooling is the
screen
. On the flip ,side some think
that is
 not an appropriate technique.I disagree with the given statement, I shall discuss my point of view in the ahead paragraphs. On the one hand, we can say that there are a plethora of ways of teaching.
However
,
due to
 technology and urban standards of people, they are giving attention to programming media.
While
screen
 impact is dreadful for pupils.
Firstly
,
children
 have eye issues with watching a
screen
.
For example
, In these days seven to eight years kids have low eyesight as compared to decades before. The only reason is they have lots of
screen
time
. They have
screen
time
 in schools
as well as
 at home.
Secondly
, The second reason behind
this
 can be parents do have not enough
time
 for their kids.
In addition
, they are just thinking about their comfort
instead
 of their
children
's well-being future. On the second hand,In the modern era schools have now these types of standards, where Tv is a must. We can see that in kindergartens offspring are learning from tv ,not from their books. Because teachers believe that's an appropriate way of teaching, Anyhow
this
 thought is propitious.
For instance
, In a doctor's ,interview he said in 1-2 decades before
children
 have disordered naturally but now we are rooting it by the screens.we can say that parents and teachers both are responsible for
this
.
To conclude
, having said that all, there is no doubt
screen
 is helpful at some point. In spite of
this
,there should limit to all of
this
.School should change their standards regarding tv and parents must have enough
time
 for their loving
children
.
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  • passive
  • sedentary
  • limit
  • creativity
  • imagination
  • educational content
  • expose
  • different cultures
  • perspectives
  • negative effects
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