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Some people think that the media(such as newspaper) should be allowed to publish information about people's private lives. Other, however, think that there should be controls to stop the media publishing this kind of information. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many individuals say that the media should be allowed to broadcast information about humankind's private
lives
.
In addition
, some others think that there have limitations to
stop
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stopping
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 the media from declaring their own private
lives
.
This
 essay discusses both sides of
this
 altercation and I will give my own viewpoint. To start with, having the approval to publish details about the private
lives
 of people is okay with other people as an illustration of an artist because
this
 is the job that they need more specified their lifestyles, to give more reliable information to their fans, what his favourite colour, food and hobbies etc., It will gain them to have more followers, becoming famous and to have more projects in the near future so that will result to earn more money and help their own families.
On the other hand
, personal
lives
 are sacred to expose to the public because
such
 private information is not needed to know about others, being with someone special, what is real appearance of your family and what is your plan to do for all day.
This
 is a crucial moment for human beings and part of normal life. If we continue exposing their
lives
 some of them are not capable to cope and feel depressed for some reason.
Furthermore
, I believe both sides of the agreement have their own will to do what they want to do in their own
lives
.
Moreover
, there is a reason why they have to do it not for themselves but perhaps with their families.
However
, I absolutely agreed with those who want their private life secure and not to be broadcast to the public.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • freedom of the press
  • democratic society
  • accountability
  • transparency
  • public interest
  • individual rights
  • right to privacy
  • mental health issues
  • misinformation
  • responsible journalism
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